After reviewing the answers given by our peers, the group decided to discuss what we should change about our treatment to make it our final copy. We decided that the issues raised were mainly going to effect the way that we shot and edited the film and that they were less significant to the treatment. Issues such as the effectiveness of the twist at the end and the conventions of a genre will be made by features such as the mise-en-scene of the scenes and the pace of the editing. We made a few, minor changes to the treatment, including dropping a scene as we felt it lacked meaning and did not add to the narrative; we also had time in mind, as we had a maximum of 5:30mins. Also, we added an explanation of David Bird's motive for murdering his wife, since this was also an issue raised after the feedback session.
And here is our final Treatment for our film, hosted on Scribd.com :
Merajio Treatment, Final Revised Version
